Avatar Script Inciting Incident

Avatar Script Inciting Incident

This article analyzes the Inciting Incident in the Avatar script, identifying it as paraplegic Marine Jake Sully being assigned his late twin brother's Avatar body, giving him the chance to walk again. It highlights director James Cameron's decision to cut extensive setup—including scenes of environmental devastation on Earth and Sully's military service—from the original treatment to get the audience into the action and the story's "focused throughline" as quickly as possible.

James Cameron knows how to get a story in motion. Jake Sully, a paraplegic Marine, is assigned his late twin brother’s avatar. Though it’s not his body, the avatar gives him an opportunity to walk again. In Avatar‘s screenplay (available for download here), the inciting incident, Jake meeting his avatar, happens on page twelve. In the film, it comes across the screen at minute eight. There was much more to the beginning of the film in the original treatment (available for download here). In the end, Cameron knew what to leave out:

If you look at Cameron’s original Avatar treatment (do a search for “Avatar scriptment”) that was written years before the movie went into production, the story opens on Earth and shows us the environmental devastation that we’ll soon learn has prompted humans to explore deep space for more natural resources. It goes into a long-winded (but fascinating, at least on paper) explanation of the importance of energy to space travel. We meet Jake Sully as he fights in a war and is paralyzed in battle, then approached about filling his brother’s job on Pandora. This was all SETUP that Cameron originally felt was crucial.
But he junked it for the movie so the audience would get into the action as soon as possible. He started the shooting script LATER so we would find the focused throughline–the spine of the story that drives the action–as soon as possible. [1. Calvisi, Daniel P. “Avatar Script.” Act Four Screenplays. 24 Aug. 2011. Web. 24 Aug. 2011. Link.]

William Robert Rich
William Robert Rich

William Robert Rich is the editor of ScreenplayHowTo.com (SHT) and co-author of Story Maps: The Films of Christopher Nolan.

Based in Brooklyn, New York, William's unique approach to narrative analysis fuses his background as a former teacher and a software engineer. He realized that the efficient logic of code and the clear pedagogy of the classroom could be applied directly to screenwriting.

This data-driven approach allows him to rigorously analyze a screenplay's logic and identify structural inconsistencies, forming the foundation of all the high-authority beat sheets and structural insights featured on SHT. He makes the engineering of a great story easy to learn.

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2 Comments

  1. I’m looking for the *original* 80-page scriptment, not the longer one currently available online. Any chance that you have a copy?

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